Tuesday, October 9, 2012
Revised blog
Hello,
My name is Rashad and I'm blogging today about a article in the new
york times regarding climate change and preparing for said changes. In
the article "New York Is Lagging as Seas and Risks Rise, Critics Warn" by
Mireya Navarro, she discusses the fact that climate change is
drastically affecting the safety and well being of low level areas in
New York and that city officials (Con Edison, mayor Bloomberg, etc.) are
not contributing to preparations. Others also agree with Navarro, like
Douglas Hill (part of the storm surge research group) who believes
Bloomberg doesn't quit fathom how serious this possible threat is.
Considering the numbers in the article, it's a serious enough dilemma
that could cripple New York, leaving hundreds of thousands home less and
the economy in a state of disarray. In one interesting comment left by
reader Jim Gordon, He comments on the attempts made to prepare for the
crisis with out trying to stop the crisis from happening at all. To
Quote him directly he wrote; "Spending billions of dollars to build sea gates without an Apollo like
effort to stem the flow of carbon pollution currently accelerating
rising sea levels, warming oceans and more intense an frequent storms is
like treating the symptoms without curing the disease." This quote is in layman terms the essence of what mayor Bloomberg is trying to do, which as Jim emphasizes, is a bad idea.
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Hi Rashad, I have been assigned to read your blog and respond to it. i think this is a good summary to start about what is happening to New York due to climate change and that officials are not contributing to preparations. In the part you are quoting from a reader's comment you are explaining with your own words what Gordon tried to say about these crisis but i would suggest to you to explain what those words mean to you. You migh try to add: i believe, i think, i agree, etc. to give to the readers a further understanding of what is happening with the city. Overall, this was a good job telling to the readers how climate change is affecting the low level areas and that NYC is not completely prepare for changes of the mother nature. Regarding to grammar, check the part where you are introducing the quote. You are using a semicolon after the word "wrote" try just to erase that and it will be fine. Also, at the end you are ending with a period before the quotation mark. Try to put the period after.
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